Easy trimmings
Writing concisely makes things easier for the reader. Sometimes it is easy to lose words without losing meaning:
In order to establish whether there are living organisms on the planet Mars, be advised that scientists are in the process of initiating a programme to send a robotic sample collection device in order to analyse samples of earth from the planet surface.
These 43 words could be recast as just 13:
Scientists will send a robot to see if there is life on Mars (and isn't this easier to follow?).
In order to................to
In the event of............if
In the near future.........soon
For the purpose of.........for
As a result of.............because
He is a man who............he
Checkup....................check
Join together..............join
In order to establish whether there are living organisms on the planet Mars, be advised that scientists are in the process of initiating a programme to send a robotic sample collection device in order to analyse samples of earth from the planet surface.
These 43 words could be recast as just 13:
Scientists will send a robot to see if there is life on Mars (and isn't this easier to follow?).
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