27 July 2008

Easy trimmings

Writing concisely makes things easier for the reader. Sometimes it is easy to lose words without losing meaning:

In order to................to
In the event of............if
In the near future.........soon
For the purpose of.........for
As a result of.............because
He is a man who............he
Checkup....................check
Join together..............join

In order to establish whether there are living organisms on the planet Mars, be advised that scientists are in the process of initiating a programme to send a robotic sample collection device in order to analyse samples of earth from the planet surface.

These 43 words could be recast as just 13:

Scientists will send a robot to see if there is life on Mars (and isn't this easier to follow?).

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